I love Raymond Feist's works and his writing style. However, I have to admit his books have a LOT of errors on consistency and continuity.
His earliest books are great and very well-written. However, as he achieved more and more fame, the quality of his writing fell considerably. Fortunately, his storytelling remained energetic and exciting, for a time allowing me to forgive the sloppy craft and error-prone literature to focus on the great adventures we kept spinning. Near the end, however, the errors and strange characterizations started to pile up and definitely affect the quality of the story. Fortunately, for the last couple books, his quality improved immensely, allowing us to all leave Midekmia on a high note.
But also, apparently Mr. Feist never goes back to re-read his old books, according to his own interviews. That is something I feel every writer should do. In my opinion, every writer should be the biggest fan they can be of their own material. The should know it inside and out and be able to answer any trivia question put to them. Or at least as close as they can get. If a writer does not do this, they risk running into issues like Mr. Feist has aplenty: contradictions. Any Star Wars fan who has seen the prequels know exactly what this is.
Basically, it sends the impression that the creator themselves care so little about their own work that they can't even be troubled to look up facts about their own universe (like the infamous 'Jedi being the guardians of the Republic for over "a thousand generations" vs. "a thousand years"' from Star Wars). Sure, every writer will miss something and it's very difficult to keep a dozen plot threads in line through the hundreds of edits. But, when you lose track of entire characters and major milestone events in your own stories, that will stand out to even casual readers.
So, just for fun, I've decided to compile a list of all the contradictions as well as what I feel are some problems with characterizations, especially of some of the female characters in Feist's later books.
Major Contradictions (using Chronological Order)
Riftwar Trilogy (Magician, Silverthorn, Darkness at Sethanon)
- No major contradictions. This sets the tone for the whole epic, and he does a marvelous job of world building and maintaining consistency.
Interim (Krondor: The Betrayal, Krondor: The Return, Tear of the Gods, Prince of the Blood, King's Bucaneer)
- The title "Seignur" is introduced in Krondor, the Betrayal as some fancy, formal word for "Squire" and then never, ever used again. This title was used in the video game, but since it is so out-of-place and never referenced in any other book, it would have been better to just leave it as Squire James and Squire Locklear (or at least "Baron" or something we've seen and heard in other books).
- The ages in The Betrayal are all over the place and inconsistent in its own story.
- Owyn describes himself as "twenty and two summers" (22 years old). Earlier, he mentioned he found the Cavell Keep bolthole with his cousin Ugyne when he was "nine" and she was "eight," meaning she as at most just under two years younger (assuming they have vastly different birthdays). When Ugyne meets James, he assesses her as "eighteen at the outside", but the above would indicate she is 20 or 21 years old, quite a bit different from 18.
- Gamina was stated in Silverthorn to be around 7 (give or take). In Sethanon, she would be a year older, around 8. The Betrayal is stated to happen ten years later (it states the current time as ten years past "The Great Uprising" of Murmandamus. This would put Gamina at around 18, yet she is described as "young, not quite seventeen years of age" when she first reads Gorath's mind.
- Even worse than this is when Pug, Owyn, and Gorath rescue Gamina on the desert world, she is described as "barely into her teens" when Owyn is clearly attracted to her (Owyn is 22, and "barely into her teens" would normally be considered 13 or 14; Owyn is a lolicon?). 13 or 14 is a far cry from "not quite seventeen" and definitely not her actual age, which is eighteen. Given her speaking manner in this chapter ("Daddy! He was lying, daddy! Makala was lying all the time. He tricked me; he gave me something to make me sleepy..."), she talks like a 9 or 10 year old, making it even more boggling.
- Lucas (the innkeeper) mentions to James in Assassins that Talia is all he has left "with her brothers dead in the war", yet in Silverthorn we meet Lucas's sons (AFTER the war) when they leap over the bar to help Arutha and Jimmy catch their first nighthawk (where they plant the ambush in the Rainbow Parrot). They catch the nighthawk who turns out to be a Black Slayer and almost kills Arutha in the palace. But Lucas's sons are alive and well there. Unless they died in "The Great Uprising" of Murmandamus, this makes no sense. But if the latter were true, Lucas wouldn't have said "died in the war" (which everyone would take to mean the "Riftwar"). Also, the likelihood of two young veterans from Krondor being involved in, much less put into harm's way, during Murmandamus's attack (which came through Highcastle and attacked the Sethanon garrison) is minimal.
Serpentwar (Shadow of a Dark Queen, Rise of a Merchant Prince, Rage of a Demon King, Shards of a Broken Crown)
- William is described at having a passionate affair with a "Jezharra", yet in Tear of the Gods she is introduced as "Jazhara".
- William talks about a very strong broken-hearted romance with Jazhara, culminating in her untimely death. Yet, in Tear of the Gods, while William is described as having a puppy-dog-like infatuation with Jazhara when he was a young teenager in Stardock, William's ACTUAL tragic romance is with Talia. Also, Jazhara is both very much alive and very much at a friendly understanding with William (as in neither seem interesting in re-pursuing a romantic relationship) by the end of the book. Jazhara is described as dying roughly around 2-4 years after Tear of the Gods, so it is possible something blossomed, albeit being very out-of-character for the two, and then she dies off-screen, but this seems unlikely.
- The Panthians are stated and even shown to have a hatred for humankind from birth, yet later we meet an entire subclan of Pantathians who harbor no ill will towards humans, and state that only the priesthood had antipathy to humans. But, does this mean that the priesthood are a separate race with separate genes that inflict their newborns with hatred for human kind? That seems unlikely.
Conclave of Shadows (Talon of the Silver Hawk, King of Foxes, Exile's Return)
- As Caleb and Talon travel to Krondor from Sorcerer's Isle, Caleb explains to Talon that there is peace in the west. He mentions that the daughter of King Ryan is to be wed to the nephew of the EmpRESS of Kesh. This is despite the fact that we know Diigai has become emperor after Lakeesha's death, based on the events in Prince of the Blood. We further know from the events in Flight of the Nighthawks that Diigai is still the emperor then, many years after the events in this book. Thus, Kesh cannot have an Empress, because the ruler is Diigai, a man. It's possible that, as in some Imperial rulerships in real life, the wife of the ruling Emperor is called "Empress", but this doesn't really shake out well here, because talking about the "nephew of the Empress of Kesh" implies the Empress is the important anchor point in the relationship. Wouldn't he normally say "the nephew of the emperOR of Kesh" if the emperor was the one in charge? Instead, he identifies the empress, giving the solid impression that Kesh is ruled by a woman, which we know from the timeline is incorrect, as when Lakeesha's reign ended, Diigai, her son-in-law, took power, passing on to Sezioti, his grandson.
- Kaspar is described to have a son in Talon of the Silver Hawk, yet we later see he is childless in King of Foxes. This may have been a simple misconception on Talon's part, as he indicates this was a simple guess based on the boy and Kaspar's likeness. However, Talon is repeatedly shown to not only have a very well-trained eye, but to be a master at human nature. As for this boy, he is never shown again, nor mentioned again. He is never seen at the citadel, or as part of Kaspar's retinue. He simply vanishes, despite Talon having marked him as Duke Kaspar's son, and thus as someone notable in appearance and manner. In later editions of the book, this missing son apparently has been excised in editing.
- Talon is described as having very little affection for Svetlana, the Princess of Salmater, when he is forced to assassinate her on Duke Kaspar's orders. He has misgivings, but he describes her as vicious and without scruples in her own way. He is never described as being infatuated or in love with her. Yet, in Exile's Return, he describes her assassination as haunting his dreams and as carrying a very profound regret. Where did these strong feelings come from, for a man who never seemed to have that many regrets at the time of the action?
- At several points starting with Exile's Return, Pug and company imply that the _Riftwar_ (not the "Great Uprising" that followed it) was part of the plot of the Pantathians to free the Dragon Lords from their imprisonment, yet that makes no sense. The Riftwar was due to politics on the Tsurani homeworld and nothing was mentioned of any Pantathian interference or plots to encourage the invasion until Exile's Return. It also makes no sense how the Pantathians could have influenced Tsurani politics from across time and space, as there was no contact with the Tsurani until the Riftwar. This just reeks of colossal retcon. Later on, they imply that Nalar influenced the Tsurani to invade in order to further his plans of chaos, but this retcon of a retcon still just doesn't fit.
Darkwar (Flight of the Nighthawks, Into a Dark Realm, Wrath of a Mad God)
- Eric von Darkmoor is described as being single, despite no evidence of a divorce or breakup from Kitty. Eric and Kitty were married in Rage of a Demon King during the Festival of Banapis in a temple, blessed by the gods, and recognized by the state (by Duke James of Krondor). In Wrath, it explicitly says (and contradicts the earlier story) that Eric "never wed" and never had children.
- In the original version of Realm, Erik is asked by Nakor why he never married to which he replies that his love for the kingdom has precluded him from taking a wife in clear contradiction to the actual events in Demon King.
- In the edited versions, this clear gaffe is changed to just omit the question and answer. Thus we are left with a situation where Erik's wife (a girl he was shown to be madly in love with) has vanished from reality and is never mentioned again. No mention of her is ever made. It's as if she disappeared, despite having been Erik's legal wife by the end of "Shards of a Broken Crown". In Wrath, it now just refers to him as "never having been wed."
- Feist's personal explanations on his website further complicate the story as he describes Erik and Kitty as simply breaking up due to pressures of Erik's job needing his attention over his wife (and unfortunately splits up two well-loved characters off-screen with no explanation or closure), and never really deciding to "tie the knot", which clearly contradicts the reality of his story, in which Erik and Kitty actually DID get married, legally and religiously.
- Kaspar suddenly has a daughter in Flight of the Nighthawks, when he describes himself as having no siblings when comparing his own experiences to the two Keshian princes vying for the throne. He also states that his daughter "Natalia" also was an only child. This is quite a contradiction to the Conclave series, where Natalia is Kaspar's sister. In Realm, she again assumes her rightful place as his sister.
- Throughout Realm, during Kaspar's journey to find Jorgen and his mother, Kaspar's sister is always (with one exception) referenced as "Talia" although her full name is "Natalia". This could obviously be a nickname, but one would expect the nickname to only be used in speech, not in internal monologue or in third-person omniscient narration. This is further exacerbated by the fact that Kaspar always thought of her as "Natalia" in Exile's Return, and it is very unnatural for someone to suddenly make a pet name for a sibling after 40 years of calling her by her normal name.
- Again with Kaspar in Wrath of a Mad God: During his sojurn with the sun elves on the Peaks of the Quor, he is described as never having had any but the most cursory contact with any elves (specifically stated to be limited to an envoy at Sorcerer's Isle and even then he only had a fleeting glance). Yet, in Exile's Return, Kaspar himself visited Elvandar with Pug, and he met with both Aglaranna and Tomas! He had the most direct contact with the elves as possible! He met with their leaders, participated in a major battle when Varen attacked Elvandar, and aided in the recovery. This is as shocking a contradiction as him losing a sister and gaining a daughter! It's even more strange as he then proceeds to speak with fairly intimate knowledge on how Aglaranna fairly treats with other Elven nations (such as the sea elves in Novindus) who aren't under her direct reign. He could have learned through Pug, but he speaks as if one who has actually met Aglaranna and has seen how she deals with her fellow elves firsthand (as he actually did in Exile's return, which would make sense except for the contradiction in the proceeding paragraph).
- This is made even more stark when he tells Jim Dasher to introduce him to Tomas, saying he only knows him by reputation. Reputation? The two of them fought side-by-side in Exile! Kaspar has not only met Tomas before, but they talked, and were very friendly by the end of their time together.
- In Wrath, the Duke of Crydee is described as being "Lester", but a few chapters later, the Duke of Crydee is referred to as "Henry" and then "Harry". Presumably "Harry" is a nickname for "Henry", but "Duke Lester" changing to "Lord Henry"? This was in even the same book!
Demonwar (Rides a Dread Legion, At the Gates of Darkness)
- Laromendis is described as "barely being in the Circle of Light," although he was stated to be one of the most senior members earlier. Gulomendis is sometimes stated to have also been in the circle, but other times said to not have been.
Chaoswar (A Kingdom Besieged, A Crown Imperiled, Magician's End)
- In Legion, Sandreena is attacked by the Black Caps, knocked unconscious and then beaten and thrown off a cliff. There is never any indication or sign or thought that she was sexually assaulted. Yet in Besieged, she states that the black caps attacked her, raped her, and left her for dead, which is a major contradiction. This is a woman supersensitive to her anatomy and gender, and all the inequalities it entails in her universe. If she had realized she had been raped in Legion, she would have brought it up and launched into a tirade-monologue about the evils of all men. And if she didn't know she was raped then, how does she know now? And to just casually throw rape around like it's some kind of minor insult or an afterthought, is in itself a pretty insulting and offensive way to write a novel.
- Talon's son is introduced as "Tyrone Hawkins", even though we were previously introduced to him in Realm as "Laughter in His Eyes", or "Laff" for short. Now, with a name like that, it would be little wonder he would want to change it, but there is never any indication given that this took place. There is also no indication at all that he underwent his tribe's traditional re-naming ceremony (like how Keililapauna became Talon of the Silver Hawk), nor is there any indication he was raised with Orosini principles at all. His name is just suddenly different with no explanation given. In fact, he tells Hal directly "My father gave me this name" which contradicts Orosini tradition for a name change, where the new name is given by the Gods (or by the person himself).
- Arkan is introduced as Gorath's son despite Gorath telling James that all of his sons were killed during the plot of Betrayal, and that he left no family (aside from Cullich, whom we meet later) behind. It is also never mentioned during Betrayal, when Gorath met with Liallin, that the two are brother and sister-in-law, or that Liallin's sister, Clothild, was Gorath's wife.
- The timelines apparently work like this (ignoring the contradiction that he told Locklear that he had no more family when he killed Haseth):
- Gorath fled the battle of Sethanon 10 years prior to his exile narrated in Betrayal. At that time he had been married to Cullich the Witch according to the events in Betrayal. They had separated at this moment according to Cullich in Betrayal.
- Shortly after that, Gorath took his clan to the icy north to escape retribution for taking Clothild away from her father. This marriage was agreed on by the most powerful clan chief (the Snow Leopards) despite Gorath being widely regarded as a traitor for running from the battle of Sethanon too quickly (according to Cullich in Betrayal).
- He told Cullich in Betrayal that he lost TWO sons to Murmandamus's insanity during Sethanon, and "one was our [Gorath and Cullich's] son!" The other son could have been from a yet unheard of, previous wife, so Arkan must have been born during the interim ten years between Sethanon and Betrayal.
- Also during this time, Gorath bore three sons, Arkan and two others.
- Ten years after Sethanon, Gorath's tribe was massacred by Delekhan and Gorath fled to the Kingdom to warn them, as recorded in Betrayal. During this tale, he again met with Liallin, who should have greeted Gorath as a brother, or the husband of her sister, but she made no mention of this relation when they met. He also met Cullich once more, then was killed fighting Makala under the city of Sethanon.
- Twenty years later, according to Liallin in Imperiled, Clothild came south with her clan.
- Also according to Arkan in Imperiled (now apparently around ninety as he was less than ten years old when his father died), he had been leading his clan for thirty years, and has three sons of his own.
- In Imperiled, Jim Dasher describes himself as "never having been in love" before Fredericka, completely forgetting that he was head over heels mad in love with Feist's misogynistic symbol extraordinaire, Michelle, back in the Darkwar series. Could be that Jim just didn't WANT to remember, but the way it was phrased doesn't seem like that ever happened, especially considering how important it was to Jim at the time. One would think Jim would have at least remembered it with some measure of exasperation or humiliation.
- Laromendis, the Star Elf is portrayed as being a known member of the Circle of Light, as a suspected member of the Circle of Light, as one of the prominent members, or as an adjunct, all at different points in the story. Which was he? He was originally portrayed as one of the leaders, hence why he wasn't executed along with the rest of the Circle, but then he is portrayed as a minor member or as a peripheral member, and later in Imperiled, as only a SUSPECTED member.
Problematic Characterization
First, we need to look at the elephant in the room. For a decent-sized chunk of the series in the middle, starting near King's Buccaneer and keeping steady through the Demonwar series, there is a major problem with Feist's characterization of women. There is an overabundance of rape (both as part of the plot, and as worthless background), and love is characterized primarily as wrong and dangerous by many of the so-called "good" characters. The love we are shown doesn't seem like actual love other than lust or convenience, but we are told in so many words that it is "love."
This might have something to do with Feist's personal troubles at the time, but it definitely makes an impression. Even in a fairly grim, dark fantasy like the original Riftwar series, there was very little rape, and most female characters were very well-adjusted and characterized without either being defined solely by their sexual features/proclivities, or being control-freaks or victims. But moving into the Serpentwar series, many of these well-adjusted, empowered female characters vanished, to replaced by either a) one-dimensional victims of (usually sexual) violence whose sole purpose was to provide someone else's characterization, b) one-dimensional cardboard cutouts of "WOMAN" solely characterized by her sexual organs or sexual desires, or c) controlling and domineering ice-queens, some who shun sexuality altogether, and have a very fierce streak of misandry.
Needless to say, this caught the eye of many readers and definitely led to some very poor characterization and intolerable characters. So, let's start analyzing some of the more egregious examples (starting with the two standout worst entries):
Miranda
Miranda first appears in Shadow of a Dark Queen as a sorceress working with Calis and the Kingdom to find "desperate men" to send on a mad mission to Novindus. She then meets Pug, and they eventually marry. In Talon of the Silver Hawk, we first meet their offspring, Caleb and Magnus. We also get some view into their relationship, which continues into later books.
Miranda is very poorly characterized for someone we are supposed to sympathize with and root for. Namely, she is domineering, petulant, has a very poor temper, overly proud, arrogant, haughty, imperial, stubborn, shortsighted, disrespectful, controlling, and unable to listen to opposing points of view. She is described as ill-mannered by the narrative itself (in 3rd person omniscient).
From the very start, she is simply unlikable. She has such a superior, haughty attitude from the onset and it only gets worse from there. The romance with Pug is so forced it boggles me how two polar opposite characters could ever get together. Pug is cautious, kind, humble, and even-tempered. How he can even stand to be near Miranda is a mystery. Furthermore, Pug is shown to treat Miranda with more affection and closeness than his first wife, Katala.
Miranda's poor character first gets everyone into trouble in Rage of a Demon King where she petulantly demands that Pug attack the Demon Queen far earlier than anticipated. This results in his near-death, incapacitation, and the further deaths of tens of thousands as Pug's early gaffe led to the invaders gaining the upper hand for far longer than they should have, leading to increased casualties on both sides. Pug is described as running rashly into this ill-thought out, ill-advised measure out of some desire to prove his love to Miranda. So, from the start, her petulance, impatience, and shortsightedness has led to the deaths of thousands.
Her poor character traits are first called out by Nakor, who tells her to watch her temper (which has gotten her and her companions into trouble before). She immediately shouts angrily that she does NOT lose her temper. Honestly, is she an 8 year old child? Nakor correctly points out that she's proving his exact point, and he asks how she could have become so powerful without learning basic control over her emotions that 90% of all adults develop. Then she launches on a cry-me-a-river, I'm-so-special crybaby rant about how Nakor "doesn't really know her". Seriously, she acts like a 13 or 14-year old "misunderstood" tween crying to her parents who asked her to come back home at a reasonable hour. And she's supposed to be heroic and likable? And for a super-powerful wizard, she really can't afford to not have full control over her emotions (and become a likable character at any rate).
Miranda's flaws and faults continue to build up as the books go on. She is shown to be a cold and disagreeable mother, and she fights and battle Pug on almost every point during his administration of the Conclave of Shadows (which should be pointed out that he is 100% the full leader; he clearly stated that the Conclave is NOT a democracy, nor is there shared control). Their relationship isn't shown as a partnership of equals with her encouraging and trusting him, and vice versa. Instead she secretively goes over his head and behind his back to do things he very clearly should be informed about, sometimes publicly countermanding his orders despite him having full responsibility of the Conclave's activities. These lead to grandstanding fights, which Caleb and Magnus can recall vividly many years later (despite this being a VERY damaging thing to do in front of your children). She even flaunts Tsurani traditions and cultures, and intentionally offends people she is trying to recruit as allies simply because she cannot control her impulse to be rude, offensive, and spiteful for more than a few moments, despite the necessity.
When it comes to respecting other traditions and cultures, she is the ultimate in racist, culturo-centric arrogance. When it comes to the Tsurani attitudes on women, it can be understood how she can put herself at odds with them, but when it comes to other parts of decorum and tradition, she is sneering, belittling, or downright offensive. She is constantly belittling or bemoaning the Tsurani heritage. As a culture which clearly is based on Japanese traditions (mixed with some Aztec, apparently), this comes off as astoundingly racist. To her, only her culture (and it's a culture of one, make no mistake) is worth respect and consideration. Others are there to be belittled for their quaintness or differences.
As a nail in the coffin, she is also an idiot. When tasked with finding Leso Varen, she herself tells everyone to look for someone acting strange who may have had a personality change. Of course, she doesn't suspect the recently "ill", vastly changed in both personality and vitality, magic user she meets (who acts like a slimy car salesman when they meet) because she is too busy being snooty and prissy about how "backwards and conservative" Tsurani Great Ones are. She then follows this highly suspicious character all alone and is ensnared in a trap when it's revealed he was Leso Varen all along.
Furthermore, she allows her ignorance and stupidity to combine with arrogance and stubbornness. When commanded by a general (in the middle of a pitched combat situation, nonetheless) to pull the magicians out of harm's way, instead of immediately complying, she shot back "Why?" and even gave her own opinion on the matter. This is not something an underling (and note she was never in the chain of command, so she had no authority to question or countermand orders) does in the middle of combat. How many magicians lost their lives because of this idiot's stubbornness to just follow orders? Instead General Allenburga has to patiently explain to her the tactics of the situation and the reasoning behind his command, during which many magicians undoubtedly perish, magicians who not only lost their lives, but were not around for following battles to help save the lives of others. All due to Miranda's disgusting, idiotic personality refusing to simply follow orders in the heat of the moment and save the questions for later, because she is so domineering and arrogant, she cannot just accept someone else has the better command of a situation than she does. Any wonder why it's a relief when she is unceremoniously killed off in the next series?
All in all, Miranda is a horrible person. She is never shown to be pleasant or genuinely happy. She is always grousing, complaining, whining, ordering, commanding, rampaging, being angry, unhappy, offensive, and domineering. And I honestly believe this is all Feist can think of when he tries to think of a "strong woman," because he is unable to see any woman but an overly-masculine, disagreeable Ice Queen ogre as being "strong."
There is even a point where Miranda self-monologues that she "wasn't truly vain, she just pretended to be that way to nettle her husband and children." This is Informed Attributes of the worst sort. She is written as being constantly vain.
Miranda's ONLY saving grace is that she is fairly non-sexual throughout. Despite obviously having sex with Pug enough to at least bear two children, it is never showcased or made a part of her character. She is one of the very few women who are described or characterized without calling attention to her female anatomy. Unfortunately, this bitter pill is all we will get as far as women being characterized by something other than their genitalia, as can be seen by the following exhibits.
When it comes to respecting other traditions and cultures, she is the ultimate in racist, culturo-centric arrogance. When it comes to the Tsurani attitudes on women, it can be understood how she can put herself at odds with them, but when it comes to other parts of decorum and tradition, she is sneering, belittling, or downright offensive. She is constantly belittling or bemoaning the Tsurani heritage. As a culture which clearly is based on Japanese traditions (mixed with some Aztec, apparently), this comes off as astoundingly racist. To her, only her culture (and it's a culture of one, make no mistake) is worth respect and consideration. Others are there to be belittled for their quaintness or differences.
As a nail in the coffin, she is also an idiot. When tasked with finding Leso Varen, she herself tells everyone to look for someone acting strange who may have had a personality change. Of course, she doesn't suspect the recently "ill", vastly changed in both personality and vitality, magic user she meets (who acts like a slimy car salesman when they meet) because she is too busy being snooty and prissy about how "backwards and conservative" Tsurani Great Ones are. She then follows this highly suspicious character all alone and is ensnared in a trap when it's revealed he was Leso Varen all along.
Furthermore, she allows her ignorance and stupidity to combine with arrogance and stubbornness. When commanded by a general (in the middle of a pitched combat situation, nonetheless) to pull the magicians out of harm's way, instead of immediately complying, she shot back "Why?" and even gave her own opinion on the matter. This is not something an underling (and note she was never in the chain of command, so she had no authority to question or countermand orders) does in the middle of combat. How many magicians lost their lives because of this idiot's stubbornness to just follow orders? Instead General Allenburga has to patiently explain to her the tactics of the situation and the reasoning behind his command, during which many magicians undoubtedly perish, magicians who not only lost their lives, but were not around for following battles to help save the lives of others. All due to Miranda's disgusting, idiotic personality refusing to simply follow orders in the heat of the moment and save the questions for later, because she is so domineering and arrogant, she cannot just accept someone else has the better command of a situation than she does. Any wonder why it's a relief when she is unceremoniously killed off in the next series?
All in all, Miranda is a horrible person. She is never shown to be pleasant or genuinely happy. She is always grousing, complaining, whining, ordering, commanding, rampaging, being angry, unhappy, offensive, and domineering. And I honestly believe this is all Feist can think of when he tries to think of a "strong woman," because he is unable to see any woman but an overly-masculine, disagreeable Ice Queen ogre as being "strong."
There is even a point where Miranda self-monologues that she "wasn't truly vain, she just pretended to be that way to nettle her husband and children." This is Informed Attributes of the worst sort. She is written as being constantly vain.
Miranda's ONLY saving grace is that she is fairly non-sexual throughout. Despite obviously having sex with Pug enough to at least bear two children, it is never showcased or made a part of her character. She is one of the very few women who are described or characterized without calling attention to her female anatomy. Unfortunately, this bitter pill is all we will get as far as women being characterized by something other than their genitalia, as can be seen by the following exhibits.
Sandreena
Oh gods, where to start. This nasty pill is foisted on us late in the game, in the last two series. She is the worst character I've ever read, short of pretty much anyone in George R. R. Martin's Song of Ice and Fire. Sandreena is yet another female character characterized mainly be her anatomy. She is supposedly very hot and sexy (are there no dumpy, normal looking, middle-aged heroines in Feist's worlds?), and all the men want her, but of course, she was "damaged" by being prostituted and raped when she was a barely pubescent tween, so she has issues with her sexuality. Ugh. Again? Oh, and she is either (depending which book you read thanks to another one of Feist's trademark contradictions) beaten and humiliated sexually, or beaten and raped and THEN humiliated sexually just after she is introduced. Sigh.
That's not even close to the end of it. She's bad enough from the outset: haughty, proud, full of Informed Attributes about oh-how-smart,oh-how-principled and honorable she is, on and on about how she can't ever trust a man again, etc. <sigh> But then we find out a few chapters in that Sandreena had a sour, ill-fated relationship (seriously, again with this character archetype?) with Amirantha, another new main character introduced in the same series as a rogue-ish, gray-morality, con-artist. When the two meet, Sandreena permanently turns into the shittiest character this side of Westeros (as an aside, this is why I really don't like Game of Thrones, because EVERY character is written in a similar fashion, so I hate all of them and want them all to die horribly in a fire, and the best way to do that is to just throw the whole book on the compost heap; at least with Feist it's only a couple characters I feel that way about). In pretty much every appearance after this meeting, Sandreena is a little b*tch (sorry for that term, but it really is the best imagery to describe how she is written) who can't control herself (despite supposedly being a religious warrior of strong faith and discipline; I guess all women just can't help but turn into hysterical little children when confronted with problems of the "heart," according to the author).
To start, she punches Amirantha in the face the moment she first sees him (without any build up or introduction, or even hesitation, which is tremendously cartoon-ish and not at all how a real person would act). She then spends the next few chapters snarking at Amirantha from the sidelines while Amirantha, Pug, and the others are talking about world-threatening events. It's mind numbing how Amirantha and Pug are logically talking about a major demon threat, trying to puzzle out the cause, and how demons behave, only to have this little b*tch interject snarky, sarcastic comments that do nothing but communicate how utterly an immature child she is. To his credit, Amirantha just nods and continues on, as if to say "yes, little girl, you are an immature shit," but of course that doesn't stop Sandreena from acting like this heartbroken tween texting oh-so-serious insults on her private social media.
In fact, this behavior continues, and Feist even has Pug acknowledge how petty and banal Sandreena's behavior is. And THIS is a character we are supposed to root for? She even jeopardizes a very important mission by arguing and throwing a snarky tantrum right in the middle of it, next to an enemy camp, whining and complaining about Amirantha's strange demonic sexual perversions. All this when a surprise twist is revealed and everyone needs to be on their toes because the mission has suddenly gone sour. THAT'S the time Sandreena, a supposedly battle-hardened, martially trained, supremely disciplined warrior, decides to act like a goddamn stereotypical teenage brat? What the hell am I reading?
Even further, on two separate occasions in Gates, Sandreena confronts Amirantha and physically (and violently) assaults him with no warning, no provocation, no chance at defense. She cold cocks an unarmed, unprepared old man, even going as far as stating if she didn't need him for his knowledge of demon lore, she'd kill him because of their past sour relationship, and all indications are that she is not exaggerating or joking. Bear in mind this godd*mn b*tch wants to MURDER ANOTHER HUMAN BEING despite a) being of a supposedly pious order that respects life and b) supposedly belonging to an order which defends the weak (and Amirantha, while not weak per se, is never fighting back or raising a hand to defend himself from Sandreena's unprovoked, illegal assaults), all because she was snubbed in a relationship. And later we find out that the highest crime, the one warranting downright MURDER is that Amirantha led her on a bit. She was led on in a relationship. She was made no promises, no major lies. She was just led on a bit to get her to drop her shorts. That's it. That's a crime worthy of murder for this loathsome idiot. We never find out how, but probably he whispered sweet nothings to her and got her into bed, and it turns out he wasn't as serious about committing to a lifelong relationship with someone he just met as he was pretending to be. My Gods. If THAT'S a crime worthy of execution, you'd have to execute almost every man who picked up a girl in a bar. JESUS F*CKING CHR*ST ON A POGO STICK, YOU GODD*MN B*TCH! GET OVER IT.
Holy sh*t. Is THIS what Feist views women as? Completely dependent, imbecilic, hysterical, she-witches who only define themselves through the men in their life, especially the ones who scorned them?
The crazy thing is that this characterization makes NO sense. There is no reason to write Sandreena this way. Why even bring up relationships at all. Why does she have to be this "broken bird"? It never comes up and never makes an ounce of difference. Her relationship with Amirantha really has no effect on anything other than to have this supposedly (and complete failure of a) comic side story. There is no reason she has to be a b*tch to accomplish her characterization. Feist simply put her in here like this, and judging from how almost every woman he writes is essentially this same cardboard cutout, it really shines through just how chauvinistically broken his view on the female gender is.
That's not even close to the end of it. She's bad enough from the outset: haughty, proud, full of Informed Attributes about oh-how-smart,oh-how-principled and honorable she is, on and on about how she can't ever trust a man again, etc. <sigh> But then we find out a few chapters in that Sandreena had a sour, ill-fated relationship (seriously, again with this character archetype?) with Amirantha, another new main character introduced in the same series as a rogue-ish, gray-morality, con-artist. When the two meet, Sandreena permanently turns into the shittiest character this side of Westeros (as an aside, this is why I really don't like Game of Thrones, because EVERY character is written in a similar fashion, so I hate all of them and want them all to die horribly in a fire, and the best way to do that is to just throw the whole book on the compost heap; at least with Feist it's only a couple characters I feel that way about). In pretty much every appearance after this meeting, Sandreena is a little b*tch (sorry for that term, but it really is the best imagery to describe how she is written) who can't control herself (despite supposedly being a religious warrior of strong faith and discipline; I guess all women just can't help but turn into hysterical little children when confronted with problems of the "heart," according to the author).
To start, she punches Amirantha in the face the moment she first sees him (without any build up or introduction, or even hesitation, which is tremendously cartoon-ish and not at all how a real person would act). She then spends the next few chapters snarking at Amirantha from the sidelines while Amirantha, Pug, and the others are talking about world-threatening events. It's mind numbing how Amirantha and Pug are logically talking about a major demon threat, trying to puzzle out the cause, and how demons behave, only to have this little b*tch interject snarky, sarcastic comments that do nothing but communicate how utterly an immature child she is. To his credit, Amirantha just nods and continues on, as if to say "yes, little girl, you are an immature shit," but of course that doesn't stop Sandreena from acting like this heartbroken tween texting oh-so-serious insults on her private social media.
In fact, this behavior continues, and Feist even has Pug acknowledge how petty and banal Sandreena's behavior is. And THIS is a character we are supposed to root for? She even jeopardizes a very important mission by arguing and throwing a snarky tantrum right in the middle of it, next to an enemy camp, whining and complaining about Amirantha's strange demonic sexual perversions. All this when a surprise twist is revealed and everyone needs to be on their toes because the mission has suddenly gone sour. THAT'S the time Sandreena, a supposedly battle-hardened, martially trained, supremely disciplined warrior, decides to act like a goddamn stereotypical teenage brat? What the hell am I reading?
To his credit, Amirantha tells her to shut the f*** up and really lays down what a little b*tch she is acting like, but I can't honestly understand what Feist was trying to accomplish with this characterization. Certainly not sympathetic. It was kind of like that one part of Final Fantasy VIII when Quistis and Rinoa have a fight, and then in the MIDDLE OF THE MISSION Quistis, the mission leader, (with no option available to the player to avoid the upcoming stupidity) decides to go back and "make up" with Rinoa like she's an eight-year-old playing house (instead of a 17-year old in the middle of a vital, deadly mission). This scene with Sandreena reminded me of that, except Quistis was still technically a minor, so she at least had that lame excuse. Sandreena is supposedly a trained, skilled warrior in her mid-20s, honed by faith, tough training, and hard discipline to match the Army Rangers, but is instead acting like a love-scorned preteen? Again, what the hell am I reading? Is this really serious fantasy?
Holy sh*t. Is THIS what Feist views women as? Completely dependent, imbecilic, hysterical, she-witches who only define themselves through the men in their life, especially the ones who scorned them?
The crazy thing is that this characterization makes NO sense. There is no reason to write Sandreena this way. Why even bring up relationships at all. Why does she have to be this "broken bird"? It never comes up and never makes an ounce of difference. Her relationship with Amirantha really has no effect on anything other than to have this supposedly (and complete failure of a) comic side story. There is no reason she has to be a b*tch to accomplish her characterization. Feist simply put her in here like this, and judging from how almost every woman he writes is essentially this same cardboard cutout, it really shines through just how chauvinistically broken his view on the female gender is.
Other Female Side Characters (Rosalyn, Sylvia, Jazhara, Talia, Alysandra, Natalia, Svetlana, Michelle)
Of these, only Talia and Jazhara seem anywhere near at least normally characterized women. Jazhara is fairly strong and straightforward without being too domineering and arrogant. Talia is a bit weak and soft, but she still has some level of self-respect. The others vary in personal characteristics, but their narrative purpose all seem to have a distinctly misogynistic bent. Note that no men in the series have this same urge to use their sexuality to deceive and dominate (no, men are reserved to be brutal, violent rapists; but only if they're "evil"). Apparently Feist believes that most women possess this goal, and only women can use their sexuality as a weapon.
Rosalyn is a non-entity in the story, except to be raped. Her only character purpose is to serve as a bland "nice girl" that can get the plot in motion when she is brutally raped in front of the heroes' eyes. She is not a character, she is a simple motivation.
Sylvia is a stereotypical succubus, using sex to dominate men and achieve power through her sexual chicanery. She even achieves orgasm from her delusions of grandeur. To top off the misogynist cake, she is an insultingly bland, one-dimensional villain with no reason to be female other than her main method of domination is her sexual anatomy (hence, she must be a woman according to the author).
Alysandra also is gendered as a female only to fulfill sexual purposes. She is emotionless and without empathy, which could have been accomplished with either gender, but her only real purpose in the story is to teach Talon a lesson that love is dangerous and wrong, because all women apparently are nymphomaniac seductresses who view sex solely as a weapon to wield for power. The levels of misogyny in how Feist characterizes nearly all his female characters as being driven by a dark need to use sex as a tool to dominate men really hits its peak here.
Natalia is innocuous enough, as a whole, but she is also characterized by Feist (through Talon) as a woman who uses sex to dominate and control. She is described as being "more dangerous" than Duke Kaspar by Amafi, Talon's right hand man, simply because she can use her body to get what she wants. Svetlana has a similar characterization.
Then we have the craptacular capstone of misogynistic fail in Feist's entire body of work: Michele. She is a bit player whom we never even meet in person, but she represents Feist's huge issue with misogyny in a nice package. Michele is introduced as a dazzlingly out-of-place lover for our new hero in Wrath named Jim Dasher (great-great-grandson of Jimmy the Hand). For a few chapters, we follow Jim Dasher on his mission, where he is shown to be a highly-trained, highly-skilled, very experienced and streetwise special operative with a large degree of trust and responsibility from the crown. Then, out of the blue, he is sorely mis-characterized as being helplessly in love with a woman we have never met nor whose relatives have ever appeared in any of the books. But it gets oh-so-worse. Michele is described by Jim as lovely and kind, and a woman he wants to spend the rest of his life with. Bear in mind Jim is not a bushy-tailed young teen. He is in his 20s, has seen the world, has slept with countless women of high and low estate, so he really knows the game. He can read people, he knows the personality that scratches his itch, and he has made up his mind. Of course, this being Feist, it is revealed later she is ALSO a slutty, sexual deviant who is cheating behind Jim's back with every man she can find, using sex as a weapon to dominate, and was deceiving Jim the entire time with a phony Stepford Smiler persona. She serves literally no other purpose in the story, for after this reveal, she is never mentioned again, nor does this supposed romance drive any event or decision in the story. In fact, by the next series, it's as if this woman and this relationship never existed (yet another contradiction). That's correct, Feist introduced a character, named her, gave her a backstory, only to set her up to remind all of his readers that all women are disloyal, deceptive succubi who use their bodies as a means to control and gain power, none of whom can be trusted an inch lest they betray the innocent man they were pretending to be in love with.
Is there any wonder many readers were starting to wonder if Feist's personal issues with women were starting to dominate his work after this?
Rosalyn is a non-entity in the story, except to be raped. Her only character purpose is to serve as a bland "nice girl" that can get the plot in motion when she is brutally raped in front of the heroes' eyes. She is not a character, she is a simple motivation.
Sylvia is a stereotypical succubus, using sex to dominate men and achieve power through her sexual chicanery. She even achieves orgasm from her delusions of grandeur. To top off the misogynist cake, she is an insultingly bland, one-dimensional villain with no reason to be female other than her main method of domination is her sexual anatomy (hence, she must be a woman according to the author).
Alysandra also is gendered as a female only to fulfill sexual purposes. She is emotionless and without empathy, which could have been accomplished with either gender, but her only real purpose in the story is to teach Talon a lesson that love is dangerous and wrong, because all women apparently are nymphomaniac seductresses who view sex solely as a weapon to wield for power. The levels of misogyny in how Feist characterizes nearly all his female characters as being driven by a dark need to use sex as a tool to dominate men really hits its peak here.
Natalia is innocuous enough, as a whole, but she is also characterized by Feist (through Talon) as a woman who uses sex to dominate and control. She is described as being "more dangerous" than Duke Kaspar by Amafi, Talon's right hand man, simply because she can use her body to get what she wants. Svetlana has a similar characterization.
Then we have the craptacular capstone of misogynistic fail in Feist's entire body of work: Michele. She is a bit player whom we never even meet in person, but she represents Feist's huge issue with misogyny in a nice package. Michele is introduced as a dazzlingly out-of-place lover for our new hero in Wrath named Jim Dasher (great-great-grandson of Jimmy the Hand). For a few chapters, we follow Jim Dasher on his mission, where he is shown to be a highly-trained, highly-skilled, very experienced and streetwise special operative with a large degree of trust and responsibility from the crown. Then, out of the blue, he is sorely mis-characterized as being helplessly in love with a woman we have never met nor whose relatives have ever appeared in any of the books. But it gets oh-so-worse. Michele is described by Jim as lovely and kind, and a woman he wants to spend the rest of his life with. Bear in mind Jim is not a bushy-tailed young teen. He is in his 20s, has seen the world, has slept with countless women of high and low estate, so he really knows the game. He can read people, he knows the personality that scratches his itch, and he has made up his mind. Of course, this being Feist, it is revealed later she is ALSO a slutty, sexual deviant who is cheating behind Jim's back with every man she can find, using sex as a weapon to dominate, and was deceiving Jim the entire time with a phony Stepford Smiler persona. She serves literally no other purpose in the story, for after this reveal, she is never mentioned again, nor does this supposed romance drive any event or decision in the story. In fact, by the next series, it's as if this woman and this relationship never existed (yet another contradiction). That's correct, Feist introduced a character, named her, gave her a backstory, only to set her up to remind all of his readers that all women are disloyal, deceptive succubi who use their bodies as a means to control and gain power, none of whom can be trusted an inch lest they betray the innocent man they were pretending to be in love with.
Is there any wonder many readers were starting to wonder if Feist's personal issues with women were starting to dominate his work after this?
Comparison with previous female characters
Carline - Carline was one of Feist's best female characters. Smart, witty, strong, but also affectionate and likable, especially after her character growth due to Pug's apparent and then Roland's real death. Feist used her femininity to advantage, but didn't overdo it. Several things she accomplished and roles she represented in the books weren't at all due to her being a female character. She was strong without being domineering, kind and gentle without being a weak pushover, feminine without being overly sexual-ized. She was also never a sexual object or trophy; she always felt like she had a real life and personality of her own that existed in parallel to the story we watched with Pug, Roland, and Laurie. And finally, even though she acted the princess, she never held to any of the poor chauvinistic stereotypes of being overly emotional, hysterical, overly concerned with looks, overly sexualized, etc. The funny thing was, Carline was the very first female character in the entire series, and she was by far the best characterized of them all. Of course, when we see her again in Merchant Prince (post-Feist personal trauma with women), she is turned into this horny grandma archetype, looking to get in bed with a man a third of her age.
Katala - Katala's main problem is her LACK of characterization. She is supposed to be Pug's first love and is given quite an introduction in Magician. But after that, they are married, raise their child, and build Stardock and we rarely ever see of hear from her. We do get a few strong bits during Pug's absence in Silverthorn and Sethanon, but after that, Katala slinks away to die quietly in solitude in Prince of the Blood. Pug just dispassionately says "Oh, yeah; so sad. See ya." And he refuses to be with her at the end or even see her on her way. Yikes! What a love story for the ages!
Patrick
Moving on to a male example: Patrick is a prince at the time of the Serpentwar and is thrown into a ruling position far too early. However, his characterization is baffling given what he must have learned and trained for as a royal prince and heir. He is petulant, arrogant, and prone to tantrums as is befitting a young teenager forced into a high-stress position. He is also a far cry from the visionary ruler his grandfather, Arutha, was. This much is okay. It's not realistic to think everyone can be such a master of control and intellect that Prince Arutha was. Nor is it farfetched to believe that a young prince might have growing pains when thrust into a highly stressful situation.
However, Patrick is also a Prince of the Blood. This means he was given certain training and teaching. Throughout the first part of the series, his actions befit what we know of his character: impatient, and immature. However, in the Shards of a Broken Crown, his immaturity becomes impudence and outright idiocy.
Several times he says things that other characters deem thoughtless or offensive (even though those comments in no way would be taken as such by any real person; in fact they are only taken as such to advance the plot), but that's just the tip of the iceberg.
On two separate occasions, he blatantly antagonizes Pug, knowing full well how powerful the magician is, and acts much more like a spoiled brat who lost his treats than a prince, even an immature, rash one. The first time he scolds Pug and then throws a tantrum like a 6 year old when the Sauer attack his troops, commanding Pug to commit genocide simply because he is piqued. As the last straw, he gloats and throws Pug's conditions of ending the war with Kesh back into the Keshian's face like he was a 7 year old twit who just won a stupid game at the playground. This sudden reversion of a prince who was usually just immature and unpracticed into a playground preteen twerp is shocking, and has dire consequences to the plot both times. Each time it comes across more like the author needed the plot to move in one direction, so he forced a character to do and say things to push the plot the way he wanted without regard for the reality of whether the given character would talk and act in that fashion.
What happened to X character?
Laurie, Kasumi, Hochapepa, Tully, Meecham, Rupert Avery, Kitty, Sho Pi, Nathan, Luis, Dashel Jameson all disappear and are only vaguely given mention again (in the case of Kitty and Sho Pi, not even that much) mentioning how they died X years ago. What actually happened to them? They were VERY important characters not only in their respective books, but some in the world itself! Laurie and Kasumi were dukes, Roo was the richest man in the world who was owed a large amount of money from the Kingdom, Sho Pi was the assistant head of the nascent Church of the "Good" Arch Indar (also never mentioned again), which is pretty important, and though the Jamesons were described as the two most important people in the Kingdom, we never see Dash again, despite him becoming the head of the Guild of Thieves in Shards of a Broken Crown. We see his brother once in Foxes, and hear about the two brothers via expositional backstory delivered by Jim Dasher in Wrath, but that's it.
Talon, Kaspar, and Eric got a nice sendoff, Carline made an appearance (even if Laurie just died offscreen somewhere), and even that damned General in Novindus had his story fairly put to rest. Why can't we get at least a wrap-up for some of our main characters?
Talon, Kaspar, and Eric got a nice sendoff, Carline made an appearance (even if Laurie just died offscreen somewhere), and even that damned General in Novindus had his story fairly put to rest. Why can't we get at least a wrap-up for some of our main characters?